Yay! I made it two weeks in a row for Weekend Writing Warriors! If you want to know more about this weekend adventure, click the link or the logo to read about it and get your link listed.
I have the next snippet from my WIP. Currently titled STOPPING BULLETS, it’s the story of a young woman, Justine, with a talent for stopping bullets and moving other things with her mind. She lives a secretive life to avoid becoming a lab rat somewhere. But her secret isn’t going to remain a secret much longer.
To update: last week, Justine had been trying to keep her mind off the exposure of her secret to Quinn when he walked through the door of the diner, and she did her best to act normal. Her fellow waitress saw through her facade, though. (For the full story so far, start with the Six Sentence Sunday posts! The first one is here.)
We ended the last snippet with Justine asking herself, “Boy, did she have the wrong idea.”
And here are the next eight (if something reads a bit awkwardly, there was a bit of fudging to get this bit to eight!) :
Quinn walked straight to the counter, looked at me, then at his coffee. Finally, he took a seat. “Hi,” he said as he tried to look at me again, but his eyes darted back to the coffee. “Uh, thanks.” He took a sip, then unbuttoned his coat with one hand. I avoided looking at his arm and ignored guilt that rose in me. “Anything else?” “Uh, yes, actually.”Work in progress here, but I’d love to know what you think!
I’m enjoying this story, today’s excerpt made me wonder why he’s being so hesitant, so I’m anxious for the conversation that will surely follow. Great snippet, keeps the story moving.
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Ohhh! You’ve made my day! So glad to hear your interest! I’ll be sure to post next week!
And yes, he’s got a few reasons to feel hesitant!
Monica recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 15 Sept
Hmm, this is interesting. What on earth happened between these two? Got me curious. Looking forward to next week!
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Hmm, what happened, huh? Well, in the first scene of this story (quite a few snippets ago) Justine had to reveal her secret – her special ability – to save Quinn’s life. He’s still in a state of disbelief over the whole thing and is a bit baffled about how to handle it – and her.
We’ll see next week! Thanks for stopping by!
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“Uh, yes, actually.” !!!! Arrrrgh! You leave us hanging here!! lol. Good 8, Monica! I can hardly wait to read this one. 🙂
LOL – yes, I thought it was a good place to leave ya! And I only had to get a little creative to make that part fit into the eight! 😉 Until next week…
Thanks for stopping by!
Monica recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 8 Sept
I think everyone gets a little creative to make it 8.
So awkward… nicely done, I can feel it. I’m guessing she’s somehow responsible for a broken or otherwise injured arm, even if she saved his life.
Caitlin recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 9/15
Thank you, Caitlin! Glad the awkwardness of the situation came through. The injury was what prompted her to act to prevent him from being killed. But she had to use her ability to do so, so at least with Quinn, her secret’s out!
Thanks for stopping by!
Monica recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 15 Sept
Love how you captured the emotion between the two and made me curious as heck! Good use of the 8’s.
Thanks, JA! Glad to hear it. Thanks for stopping by!
Monica recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 15 Sept
her guilt and his hesitancy has me intrigued
Glad to hear it, Michelle. Thanks for stopping by!
Monica recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 8 Sept
The scene is so awkward. He had what he wanted, he knows the truth so now, what can he want next. Can’t he leave poor Justine alone already?
Ah, but that would be too easy, Linda! Besides, the truth is exactly what he doesn’t want. It doesn’t make sense to him. He wants the “real” explanation. Thanks for stopping by!
Monica recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: 8 Sept
First-time listener here. The dialog in this scene is well done. I can almost feel the awkwardness of this interaction.
Beth Rhodes recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: Dismembered
Thank you, Beth! I’m glad to hear the awkwardness between these two are coming through. Nice to see you drop by!
Great scene! Ooo, and what’s the secret? Gimme a hint! 😉
LOL, Karen! In the first scene, Justine saved Quinn’s life, by stopping a bullet meant for him – in midair. He’s a bit in denial that he saw something so strange, and Justine is hoping he won’t mention it, or a hole will open up and swallow her. Hence the awkward. Thanks for stopping by!